From fcbed9ef0172ef03043869d0f5869da632898c9a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Maarten Billemont <lhunath@lyndir.com>
Date: Thu, 19 Apr 2018 23:20:09 -0400
Subject: [PATCH] Improve wording.

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 public/site/2015-05/index.html | 11 +++++------
 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)

diff --git a/public/site/2015-05/index.html b/public/site/2015-05/index.html
index 3ce49b7f..356cc30c 100644
--- a/public/site/2015-05/index.html
+++ b/public/site/2015-05/index.html
@@ -6,10 +6,10 @@ header: large
 <section id="intro">
     <h2><img src="/img/password_forgot_882804.svg" title="https://thenounproject.com/term/forget/882804/" />
         What's your <input type="password" value="password" size="5">?</h2>
-    <p>Passwords have slowly become regarded as a "necessary evil" to having accounts online.  We accept they are they way things are done and try to adapt.<br>
+    <p>Passwords are regarded as a "necessary evil" to having accounts online.  We accept them as <q>the way things are done online</q> and try to adapt.<br>
     But upon reflection, we find that we've adapted quite poorly.<br>
     </p>
-    <p>Sites everywhere expect us to come up with a secure and unique password for them.  We try our best to compensate for this unrealistic demand; we keep track of passwords in note books, apps, on our computers, or we simplify them so we won't forget.<br>
+    <p>Sites everywhere expect us to come up with a secure and unique password for them.  But we're not security professionals. We do our best to compensate for this unrealistic demand: to keep track of passwords, we reach for notebooks, our computers, apps, or we simplify them so we won't forget.<br>
     <b>We've become symptomatic</b>.</p>
 
     <h2><img src="/img/thinking_882797.svg" title="https://thenounproject.com/term/thinking/882797/" />
@@ -17,9 +17,7 @@ header: large
     <p>Humans are no good at remembering lots of passwords.  But writing them down or saving them is dangerous, too.</p>
     <p>Master Password avoids all the pitfalls: a cryptographic algorithm calculates your site's password for you, from thin air, only when you need it.<br>
     When you're done, it throws the password out of memory, so it can't be stolen.</p>
-    <p>
-    Master Password's unique approach makes you safer from loss, theft, problems with backups, sync, confiscation, snooping, and more.
-    </p>
+    <p>Master Password's unique approach makes you safer from loss, theft, problems with backups, sync, confiscation, snooping, and more.</p>
 
     <div class="widget_test">
         <p>Let's see how Master Password could help.<br>
@@ -30,7 +28,8 @@ header: large
                 <input type="checkbox" id="mp_test_1">
                 <label for="mp_test_1">My passwords are pretty simple.  Certainly not very complex or cryptographically opaque.</label>
                 <div>
-                    <p>Master Password was designed to generate high-entropy cryptographically strong and unique passwords for each of your sites.</p>
+                    <p>It shouldn't have to be <em>your</em> job to think of professional passwords.<br>
+                    Master Password was designed to generate high-entropy cryptographically strong and unique passwords for you, so you don't have to.</p>
                     <p>Humans are not great at thinking of strong passwords. Just use the password created for your site by Master Password instead.  Your accounts will become as safe as they can be against hacks, hoaxes and leaks.</p>
                 </div>
             </li>